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我写的关于中秋节的诗,高手进来评价一下

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 天边一梦
                                             悔忆当日窃仙果,
                                             只含泪眸升秋。
                                             独倚广寒宫,
                                             天地幽幽。
                                             脉脉凝,
                                             暮云,
                                             柔。  

                                          
                                             愁,
                                             星空,
                                             疑似羞。
                                             岁岁年年,
                                             又恰逢十五。
                                             奈何天上人间,
                                             冰韵何时允我归?

(注:此诗主要变现姮娥在月圆十五佳节时孤独,悔恨,凄凉,渴望团圆的情感)
                                            

 


1楼2006-08-16 12:51回复
    晕哦,题目离正文那么远…


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