V4篇外篇2 she took a deep breathe应为breath.

but that case...是buy the case吗？

Smuggling is much much lucrative than that 这里应该是much more吧？

The ones who have been standing beside me stepped ever so further.因为篇外篇用的是第三人称，所以stand beside Cohen比较好

v4篇外篇3 The day you sold me three piece of clothes，应该是3 pieces of clothes

You are gonna do do heavy labour every day! 两个do

v4篇外篇4 Ms. Merlin, no, she was not Mrs. Merlin，不是not是now

These days, he slept with his friends instead of came bothering you instead of后应该是doing

I said yesterday to smuggling spice, 是to smuggle吧

The days were joyful and fulfill,应该是fulfilling吧

Watched as he went down the stairs. Dior Merlin felt panic out of nowhere.应该是watching

Looked at the pile of leases and business papers he gave her: The clothes store that she had thrown in so much hard work and the property deeds of her house in the city… Her heart ached and nearly dropped in tears.在句首加个she比较好

v5c5 gave him a thumbs up,thumb多了个s

楼主好棒！

东西被我给拉断了……请相信，我也不是很确定这点……【这件事让我特别后悔，因为这直接导致我以后的敌人和我干架时……都特别小心自己腰部以下的地方，让我很少有机会重演此情形……】后半段忘翻了